如何升级考场英语作文

考题：假设你是晨光中学的李津，英国友好校将派教师来你校参加为期一周的暑期交流活动。活动期间，英方教师Chris 将做一个有关西方艺术的讲座。

现就讲座内容征求你校学生的意见。请根据以下提示给Chris 写一封电子邮件：

1.你喜欢的讲座话题(从音乐、美术、舞蹈中任选其一);

2.选择该话题的原因及关于该话题你感兴趣的内容;

3.希望从中有何收获。

注意：1.词数100左右;2.可以适当加入细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯。

升级前的作文：

Dear Chris，

I'm Li Jin, a student at Chenguang High School. ①I learn you'll give us a lecture about western art and want to hear our opinions about which topic to cover, so I feel an urge to make my voice heard.

②You know people have stressed the importance of studying traditional art in Chinese high schools. I'm interested in Chinese and Western art knowledge. ③I'm not only crazy about musical knowledge, but I particularly like traditional Jazz music. Can you do me a favor to talk about it?

I would rather you contrasted Jazz and Chinese folk music briefly. Waiting eagerly for your guidance.

Yours，

Li Jin

作文升档第一步：让词汇高级亮丽

利用高级词汇升级文中黑体词汇

1.about→concerning

2.particularly→in_particular

3.like→am_fond_of

4.eagerly→with_eagerness

作文升档第二步：让句式丰富多变

按要求升级句式并将黑体词汇替换为升级后的词汇

1.利用分词作状语升级句①

Learning you'll give us a lecture concerning western art and want to hear our opinions about which topic to cover, I feel an urge to make my voice heard.

2.利用非限制性定语从句+被动句升级句②

As you know, the importance of studying traditional art has been stressed in Chinese high schools.

3.利用倒装句升级句③

Not only am I crazy about musical knowledge, but I a fond of traditional Jazz music in particular.

作文升档第三步：过渡衔接更巧妙

利用适当的过渡衔接词汇衔接升级作文并誊写

范文

Dear Chris，

I'm Li Jin, a student at Chenguang High School. Learning you'll give us a lecture concerning western art and want to hear our opinions about which topic to cover, I feel an urge to make my voice heard.

As you know, the importance of studying traditional art has been stressed in Chinese high schools. Accordingly, I am interested in Chinese and Western art knowledge. Meanwhile, not only am I crazy about musical knowledge, but I am fond of traditional Jazz music in particular. Can you do me a favor to talk about it? In conclusion, I would rather you contrasted Jazz and Chinese folk music briefly. Waiting with eagerness for your guidance.

Yours，

Li Jin